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PROLOGUE: MONOLOGUE OF MANITO by CHRISwillar

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This was interesting, to say the least. I got confused in the middle though, especially when he started talking about hugging fish and being a waterbed for the "growing spawns". So, I understand he is everything and anything, but I'm not sure if he just was and always is this way, or became this way after something. I get the feeling he became this way, but I could be wrong. I like the background, and the lighting effect, which seems to shine down from heaven itself, is pretty cool. The only suggestion I would have is maybe change the font, and if you explain something about the monologue in your description that answers any of my questions, then I am sorry for not reading that first.
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CHRISwillar Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I will start out with saying, I really appreciate and cherish your critique - it was a delight to read.

As for your confusion, I'm sorry about that, here's the explanation;
Manito is the God ("Great Spirit") of the Cree Indians, he's the energy that flows through every single thing in the world, which I tried to visualize with the nature references. Also, this piece is only the prologue, there's a whole story behind yet to be written and told.
Perhaps it would be better to make that clearer and do a proper description to avoid further misunderstandings, so thank you for pointing that out!

Font types have always been a weakness of mine, so I shall be sure to work more on that - again, thank you for taking your time to give my work feedback :aww:
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shadowsmokeandfire Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No problem! And thanks for the llama! You are very kind.
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CHRISwillar Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome, dear~ and thanks once again :hug:
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shadowsmokeandfire Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
no problem!
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