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I just want to start off and say that I really enjoyed this poem. The rhyming scheme is nice, the ideas are very heartwarming, and it definitely tugs on your heart strings a little bit. The only actual "critique" I have is that I kind of knew what was going to happen as soon as you said little boy dodging cars without his parents. In that sense, it is slightly cliche. However, I like the idea that the adult, not just the child, was being nourished by this interaction, which is something I have not seen in similar stories/poems. Overall, a very good poem, and I look forward to seeing more from you.
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